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God is sexless,but in all the scriptures God is addressed as HE,however it seems nature has second thoughts and it seems maybe GOD is a female,for only a mother can have mercy,kindness,unconditional love towards her children
Wow, I'm glad I took the time to read this. The story was very compelling from beginning to end. I could feel Crisilin's fear throughout the story. I kept wanting to know what was so horrible that the dragons did, and I'm glad your character chose to escape from her Quelda responsibility at the end. I would love to read the novel. By the way, congratulations on getting published! You are so lucky, I wish I could do the same with one of my novels. Don't take the experience for granted!
I personally have doubts about intelligent life existing elsewhere in the universe coming to Earth. I'm not saying definitively that aliens don't exist, but existing within range of Earth, both physically and temporally, considering the incredible series of events necessary for the formation of intelligent life and the relative brief time span said intelligent life exists, seems really unlikely. And even if all of those conditions are true, why would aliens hide their presence from us imperfectly (if they wanted to truly hide themselves from us, you would think that we would never, ever, see them)? There are possible answers, but like I said, none of them seem likely. All that considered, I think shutting down this agency was a good idea.
The universe is so huge that I'm sure there's life out there. But, because it's so huge, I can't for the life of me imagine why aliens would pay so much attention to us. Unless, of course, they come for the laugh, rather like people visiting Bedlam lunatic asylum three hundred years ago. And they couldn't get here at all unless they've found a way to go faster than light, or to bend space time.
Thank you very much, and for stopping by, as I know you are very busy. That is my intention, to really draw the readers in with this story and leave them wanting, and so far, the concensus is that I've accomplished this, so I thank you. Thanks again for stopping by.
You have a very well-rounded imagination. I really enjoyed reading what I read of "Bloodmaiden." I would definitely read the novel. It holds your attention and really draws you in the story. I am very interested in finding out what happens. You left us wanting more.
Please be certain to check out "Bloodmaiden", one of the stories mentioned in this article, here on Kalkion.
Thanks, and hope you all enjoy! ^_^
I agree with your choices pretty much across the board! 'The Crawling Eye' is an excellent movie that seems to get picked on. I was kind of bummed out when MS3TK made fun of it. I just recently watched 'Then' again and it'd even better than I remember. The story telling is just perfect as it starts out as a murder mystery and slowly builds up to the monsters.
gary
Thank you very much. And again for teaching me what meta-fiction means. ^_^
Thanks, Salvain, my Lil Gandalf; you're always such an encouragement! See you on webook.
P.S. What do you mean by giving me a grade of A minus? Don't I deal with such annoyances enough at McKendree? ^_^
A brilliant review; I thank you for taking the time to look so deeply into my work. This story is actually part of a book I mean to publish, so such positive criticism is quite motivating. I'm actually currently in the process of enlisting a publisher or agent for this particular book, so hopefully the publishing world will view my work just as thrilling and full of promise as yourself. If you are interested in further works of mine, or in contacting me, please head to my webook page (my user name is Chasmira1060) or you can message me here:
ChristineESchulze@gmail.com.
Thanks again for commenting as promised; I did not expect such a detailed review, so I really appreciate such extensive and professional feedback.
Wow, thanks, Gryody. I like to think of myself as the next Rowling, of course, as I hope many readers will someday enjoy my books. However, it's very encouraging to hear it from a fellow writer and reader. Thanks for stopping by!
Beginning:
WOW! This is extremely gripping! It definitely compels me to read more!
This is awesome. It fills the reader with the emotions she feels, and that is quite a hard task to achieve.
The plot thickens... It's mysterious and inventive. I'm compelled to read on, so I can see what's so bad about the wedding....
I love the fact Crisilin is showing pure human emotion, the fact she's desperately wants to run away, yet has to go through those doors, and not just because she's being forced to.
I'm finding it's becoming deeper as the story goes on, the fact that she knows the male she's to be married to, and is obviously close to him. She respects him enough to not want to marry him. Yet, you can feel the relief as she sees him.
This is fantastic! How can a piece of work like this go unpublished? It's deep, gripping.
Middle:
The plot thickens as I read. I love how the plot releases it's self to the reader! I can just see the scene in pure detail. And the way you spread the lore! It's an amazing technique telling the reader the story the character had read.
I see now that the character is feeling for more than just herself. She feels the terror and torture of the Quelda, which is amplified to the the reader. I love how she's thinking back to the books she's read in the pas, again proving she's well read.
She's also perfectly aware of other people's emotions, which makes you gain a sense of respect for her.
It makes me think that she was charismatic in her past.
It's amazing how you're going back and fourth in time using the girl's train of thought to disperse their world's lore to the curious reader.
End:
WOW! This was awesomely gripping and tense. I felt the exact emotions the character was, I could feel the tense atmosphere and the relief she did as she got behind that building.
I love the connection between her and her aunt! You can interpret the fact that they only had each other as a family.
I found this story to be full of gripping moments and compelling language. It introduces a lot of interesting concepts, such as sacrificial enslaved royalty. (How's that for turning the feudal system on it's head?) I very much like the author's use of first-person present-tense narrative, as well as a few other techniques not seen very often in published fiction. Their use in this work was a act of genius, as it allows the reader to feel as though they are experiencing the last days of the narrator along side of her, which makes all the feelings of hopelessness expressed throughout the story all the more real.
My one complaint might be the seeming unevenness of the writing, due to the occasionally odd punctuation or word choice. However, this is redeemed by the writer's mastery of vividly painting the world in which the characters live. And by live, I mean think, feel, dream, and, yes, wallow in utter hopelessness. Some of the descriptions are just beautiful, if not painful and sometimes morbid: "A silence, not like peace but like death...." In one scene, the author succeeds in turning the very moon into a villain with phrases like, "...the betraying light of the moon," "The moon shone bright, following us like some snitch intent on capturing and turning us in," "...fearful the traitorous moon would somehow catch the glint of our eyes and reveal us..." and, "...that wretched moon." In each passing moment, it is almost as if the reader takes each breath along with the character, for the narrator is your closest companion on a journey through her own horrifying reality.
It should be no surprise, then, that my favorite parts are where author most obscures the lines between poetry and prose. Three particular passages stick out in my mind: the opening paragraphs describing the four dragon dynasties, the ceremony of the previous Quelda, and the dream sequence. The opening paragraphs are beautifully written, with long, flowing sentences, vivid descriptions, and a literary rhythm not unlike what you might find in the first chapter of Genesis. The ceremony, although it struggles a bit at the endeavor, attempts to weave that same beauty intermittently throughout a stark picture of gruesome terror, while on its way to an important revelation about the plight of our characters. The dream sequence further showcases the authors ability to plunge readers deep into a world of color, both vibrant and swirling, and then pluck them out only to toss them in again.
Overall, I think this story is unique, imaginative, and nicely written. It contains elements of romance, fantasy and adventure, with a few sprinkles of poetry that adds up to a very satisfying combination. I look forward to reading more from this author and seeing this writing style fully developed.
Grade: A -
This is such an awesome story, as I have spoken before inreference it lures me to the vision of Lord of the Rings meet Harry Potter. I love it. Christine has a very deep and vivid imagination and I see her as the next J.R.R Tolkien and J. K Rowling. Keep the stories comming Christine, you have a true gift.
Will catch you back on webook
Peace
This sounds really interesting and intriguing. I actually really like the meta fictional element you brought to it as well. I love meta fiction :)
Thank you for replying to my article, and I'm glad you enjoyed it! Yes, there were many more I could have added (I love "This Island Earth") but didn't want to make the article too long! "Earth vs. the Flying Saucers" was excellent, and in fact, I think I may devote my next column to Ray Harryhausen films!
Thanks for stopping by to read! ^_^ Glad you enjoyed, thanks for commenting!
Very Very good!
Hey, thanks, see you on webook! ^_^
Thanks a ton!
Great work!!!
Your imagination is extensive and i became involved in the story quickly. Well done. Shah Wharton (shahw at webook). X
I may be showing my age a bit but I remember seeing all these movies as first released in theaters. Here are just a few random comments and memories.
1. There were a lot of bad SF movies. I once counted that one would have to sit through about seven stinkers to finally see a good movie. I agree with most of your list, that they were above average.
2. George Pal just doesn't get enough credit for his contribution to SF films. His Manta Ray Martian ships can still stand up to any ships in modern SF movies.
3. "Them" was a child of the times. The public was slowly becoming aware of the nuclear threat and possible effects of radiation, and "Them" was a reflection of this fear. Unfortunately the movie was followed by a host of radiation affected creatures which were quick knock offs and never reached the standards of "Them"
4. I agree whole heartedly with your judgement that remakes have never really captured the essence of the originals. My personal pet peeve is "King Kong" (though not strictly SF). There have been two sequels made with dazzling special effects, but the writers and directors never seemed to really capture the original Kong. Perhaps the remakes concentrated two much on making Kong look like a giant gorilla while the original had a gorilla-like appearance but was much more terrifying and noble than its imitators.
5. "It" was a great movie and I immediately thought of the film when I saw "Alien". "It" was influenced by a standard plot devise in the horror genre in which a group of people would somehow become trapped in a haunted house and were picked off one by one by the ghost/monster.It was just displaced to the confines of a space ship.
6. I would suggest a few movies for your list and and would be interested in your reaction. "Metropolis" (though a silent film and chopped up into many versions) is a "must see" for science fiction buffs just to see the magnificent roots of SF. I was charmed by "This Island Earth" and by "Earth Versus the Flying Saucers". "The Blob" is fun to watch and the remake fell short of the mark.
That's about all for now
Lorne